Sorry this has taken so long. I have 45 juniors and 45 seniors this year, and the seniors are in a college writing class. So, lots of fun! These are from different sources, from junior Regents review essays and essays on The Crucible and The Scarlet Letter, to senior Personal Narratives and Compare/Contrast essays. As always, all samples taken directly from student work with no significant teacher editing; my comments in ( ).
- Beauty has been around since as far back as the early Greek philosophers. (But no further.)
- I defiantly will work out tomorrow. (I dare you to oppose my work out plan!)
- Computers and their technology keep rising.
- When a person here's the crack of the bat...
- Abby causes the most blame.
- John Proctor had an adultery with Abby.
- He also ended up die from Abby.
- Elizabeth was ferious. (That would be furious.)
- After John continued to fight Abby was just all "Oh you don't mean that" and "I love you" type of attitude.
- Abby envies Elizabeth for being the goody to John Proctor.
- Abby pushes him to replenish the relationship.
- John Proctor upholds a very strong presence in the play.
- Hester was outcasted.
- Dimmesdale should have acted more religious instead of having sex with Hester.
- Now we are able to talk to people face to face, using a computer.
- Her seven children dye at birth. (I wonder what color?)
- ...so they will not die from a painful death.
- I need to work more on the writing having the words flow together better. (You're not kidding.)
- Writing can help reading by you should proof read everything to see if it makes sense or not.
- While my dad packed the can... (She meant "car." I hope.)
- My dad sounded like a broken recorder.
- ...in the comer of my eye...
- They got heaving into alcohol and marijuana.
- We knew they couldn't fallow that.
- Al of a sudden...
- A dynamic character is one who changes their actions or ways of going about events.
- ...who else see saw with the devil. (I have always loved see-sawing with the devil.)
That is it for now. But I will be collecting more than a lot of papers this year, so I hope to have more frequent posts. Hope no one is heaving into alcohol!
Jeremiah
