- The court system has to find a way to deter future crimes committed by youth. (Shouldn't we deter the youth and not the crime?)
- Marilyn Monroe's modeling career was at an all time high.
- Talking could become a peace of mind feeling for both parties involved.
- ... then while wearing a pair of rubber gloves, the needle is placed in an autoclave. (Never mind what an autoclave is, he has a needle that can wear gloves!)
- ... cars that run on energy... (As opposed to my car, which runs on positive thinking.)
- When one exercises it enhances many assists of health.
- When an individual is active it helps them having a good mental and emotional aspect on life. (How is your aspect on life?)
- One specific group in society would be students of all ages. (Yes, very specific.)
- If you think your going to do poorly you might actually will.
- Americans are on the decline in the world's industry.
- The kidney and liver are important organs, in the human body, for the need of survival in life.
- People did crime even before artists singed about it. (This sentence is a crime.)
- When a person demonstrates weight control... (Ta Da! Weight control!)
- The number of people that can vote in the United States has grown incredulously over the past hundred years.
- (This I saw on a sign in the hall advertising a competition between classes.) Win the covenant class disco ball! (Is it the same disco ball that God gave unto Moses signifying that his were the chosen people?)
- As the saying goes, "laughing releases endorphins, endorphins make you happy." (I love that old saying; mom used to say that all the time.)
Happy Holidays!!
J
The construction of these sentences is VERY similar to the emails I receive from students at the ESL program. Like from students in Japan, China, Brazil, who barely know the language. Such as this one: "When an individual is active it helps them having a good mental and emotional aspect on life." You can tell that it wants to mean something, but it does not have the articulation necessary to go beneath the surface thought. Kinda like "helping the environment." It's true: Americans are on the decline in the world's industry. Although the sentence about US voting rights in the last 100 years is perceptive, and demonstrably true.
ReplyDeleteYes, the sentence about voting rights may be true, but who is incredulous about it I wonder? Even as a teacher I often can't tell if the construction of these sentences is due to laziness in proofreading or serious inability to manipulate language in sophisticated ways. I want to believe that if they re-read these sentences they would see that they make no sense, but I am afraid it's not true.
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